How should I say something like this?
The system I designed can remember the order of messages.
I think that remember doesn't suit this sentence. What word should I use?
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1What's wrong with it? Do you feel that systems shouldn't remember because they're not alive?– user230Sep 15, 2013 at 21:23
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No ! Just it seems incorrect to me . Now that you said that I feel better ! Thanks !– aghArdeshirSep 15, 2013 at 21:29
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2"The system can store the order of messages" might work as an alternative depending on context. There's nothing particularly wrong with your sentence though.– Nigel HarperSep 15, 2013 at 21:40
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2you might use "keep track of". Or you might say something like, "The system I designed manages an ordered list of messages..."– JimSep 16, 2013 at 2:27
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The problem many people have is keeping sentences like this direct and to the point, without a lot of meaningless "fluff". Simple, direct minimalism, especially in technical documentation, is a good thing.
To that end, I like this one:
The system I designed can maintain the order of the messages...
Direct and to the point.
You can try one of the following :
- The system I designed keeps track of the order of the messages
- The system I designed stores the order of the messages
- The system I designed maintains the order of the messages
- The system I designed keeps the messages in order
- The system I designed looks after the order of the messages
and so on…
This may not bear the same meaning that you intend, but you could try:
The system I designed retains the order of the messages.
Try either of these:
The system I designed can retain the order of messages.
The system I designed has the ability to remember the order of messages.
