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We have a study about the effects of overcrowding management on patient safety in the emergency department of a hospital.This management is based on a stabilization model. Now I want to write the title of the paper, but a problem occurs. Which one of the following (or any more suggestion) seems to be more preferable?

The effects of overcrowding management based on the stabilization model on patient safety in the emergency department: a clinical trial

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The effects of stabilization model-based overcrowding management on patient safety in the emergency department: a clinical trial

  • Such titles often employ a colon, but you'd want to rearrange the order: Patient safety in the overcrowded emergency department: a clinical trial of the stabilization model – Tᴚoɯɐuo Sep 10 '16 at 14:46
  • You can eliminate "the effects of management based on" and make the title more succinct by setting the stabilization model as the focus of the clinical trial. Since you wrote "the stabilization model" I assume that model is one already recognized by your audience as a management model. If that model is a new idea, and would not be known to your audience, you should say "a stabilization model". – Tᴚoɯɐuo Sep 10 '16 at 14:53
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Your titles are too long, they are almost a summary of your report.
You'll want to mention the keywords (think word search).

The key points seem to be

overcrowding management
modelling
emergency care

Alternative titles might be

Overcrowding Management: A Stabilisation Model
Overcrowding Management in Emergency Care
Overcrowding Management in Emergency Care: A Stabilisation Model

A Stabilisation Model for Overcrowding Management
A Stabilisation Model for Overcrowding Management in Emergency Care

Clinical Experience of Overcrowding Management

Many of the details of a research paper are quickly spelled out in the summary just after the title.

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Both examples are painfully long and complex, making them difficult to comprehend in a single sentence. I think a better title would break the detail down:

The effects of overcrowding management on patient safety in the emergency department: a clinical trial based on the stabilization model.

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