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Can lower be used in the following fashion?

1000 yen said the first price tag. 750 the second one. The lower number of the latter shocked me.

If not, what's a better alternative?

  • @AbsoluteBeginner Why do you prefer your version over mine? I'm curious. – alex Nov 24 '16 at 8:47
  • You may use your sentence if you prefer, no problem. – user5267 Nov 24 '16 at 9:02
  • There's nothing wrong with the use of "lower" in that sentence, but It's far from idiomatic in English, and would be better phrased as "That the latter number was lower shocked me" or "I was shocked that the latter was lower!" – P. E. Dant Nov 24 '16 at 10:18
  • Why use number when you are talking about prices? Instead "The lower price of/on the latter one shocked me." – user3169 Nov 25 '16 at 6:16
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I would suggest only one slight change of wording:

1000 yen said the first price tag. 750 the second one. The lower number on the latter shocked me.

"number of" would suggest a quantity of price tags, not a price ON the price tag.

NOTE ALSO: It is incorrect to begin a sentence with a numeric value AND, your second sentence is incomplete.

SO, the final version would be:

One Thousand yen said the first price tag; seven hundred fifty said the second one. The lower number on the latter shocked me.

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