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I am working on my personal statement for grad school, and I am wondering whether this sentence is grammatically correct:

I then conducted eight sets of observation to compare the social life and daily interactions in Hispanic neighborhoods with those in non-Hispanic neighborhoods.

I am concerned about the usage of "those" before "in non-Hispanic neighborhoods".

I think

compare X in A with X in B

is the right structure, but in the sentence I used X is relatively long. Therefore, I think I may not want to restate X after the word "with", and instead I use the pronoun "those".

I am wondering whether it is OK to use "those" here to substitute "social life and daily interactions".

  • Welcome to ELL! Could you please comment on why you think those is or is not appropriate, otherwise you are asking for proofreading which is off topic on ELL and this question will probably be Closed. – Peter Dec 14 '16 at 9:20
  • OK. So I think "compare X in A with X in B" is the right structure, but since in the sentence I inputted, X is relatively long. Therefore, I think I may not want to restate X after the word "with", and I use a pron.- those. The question here is asking whether using the pron. to substitute X is proper here. – freeyang Dec 14 '16 at 9:51
  • I find the phrase "eight sets of observation" hard to understand. Do you mean you observed the same group pairs 8 different times, 8 different group pairs once each, or something else – MMacD Dec 14 '16 at 10:52
  • I was trying to say eight different group pairs. Thank you for pointing out this place! – freeyang Dec 14 '16 at 14:50
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You are correct in using

those

to substitute for

the social life and daily interactions in Hispanic neighborhoods

interactions in Hispanic neighborhoods and those non-Hispanic neighborhoods

in your sentence, also acceptable would be

interactions in Hispanic neighborhoods and (in) non-Hispanic neighborhoods
interactions in Hispanic neighborhoods to those in non-Hispanic neighborhoods

Also, note that you should use

eight sets of observations

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