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Someone wrote:

Over the last days , I’ve read a couple of my friends’ entries on the web about how tremendously picturesque places look in snowy winter, and I wish it snowed and got colder in Warsaw too.

I refined it to:

Over the past few days, I’ve read a couple of entries from my friends about how picturesque places look in a snowy winter, and I wished it would snow and get colder in Warsaw too.

I just did these corrections or suggestions based on my intuitions, but don't know if I was correct or not.

  • I think after "a couple of" I should use a noun like "entries" something without a possessive construction, am I right?
  • I omitted "on the web" because in my version it would make the sentence too wordy and I didn't find a good place for it. where it could be placed?
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  • "a couple of my friends' entries" is idiomatic spoken English. Your improvement is less "crowded" but there's no grammatical reason to change it. The improvement is not a "correction". Dec 19, 2016 at 14:59
  • @tromano do you mean his original sentence is grammatical and natural?
    – Ahmad
    Dec 19, 2016 at 15:15
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    @TRomano Over the last days.... bothers me. Would it be grammatical but not idiomatic in this context (as opposed to Over the last days of the month/year etc? Dec 19, 2016 at 15:19
  • @Ronald Sole: I agree, but I wasn't going to proofread the entire sentence. I was responding to the specific question about the possessive. Dec 19, 2016 at 16:01
  • @tromano there are other specific questions like is it " how beautiful ..." or "how very beautiful ...". Moreover, i think specifying what's idiomatic should be allowed on this site
    – Ahmad
    Dec 19, 2016 at 16:26

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I would say:

In the past few days, I’ve read a couple of entries from my friends about how picturesque everything looks during a white winter, and so I wish it would snow and get colder here in Warsaw, too.

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