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Is it correct to say in a poem or a rap song, "the fields are ripe the wheat is white" Thanks very much.

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    Being that this is for a creative work, I'd say you could do almost anything. Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 10:46
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    "The fields are already ripe for harvest." - John 4:35
    – Mick
    Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 11:44
  • If anything, "the wheat is white" is the weird part for me. I had always felt that wheat had been a hue of brown or yellow. Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 12:02
  • Look up "white wheat".
    – TimR
    Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 13:27
  • A rap song about wheat would be interesting, especially white wheat.
    – TimR
    Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 13:50

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The fields are sown, and the wheat is grown

Fields cannot be ripe though one can say X is ripe for Y.

Ripe and white are slant rhymes: they have the same internal vowel sound.

Sown and grown are ends rhymes, which might be better in rap.

The fields are ripe to my ear just sounds ignorant, sorry. The wheat is ripe does not sound ignorant.

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  • Really? A downvote for lines that rhyme? Please.
    – Lambie
    Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 20:16
  • Not my downvote, but: google.com/…
    – TimR
    Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 21:57
  • @TRomano I carry my culture in my head. Google is not culture. It's a hit machine. Hits are not arguments about language.
    – Lambie
    Commented Jan 5, 2017 at 21:59
  • Such broad statements are too extreme: you must read through the Google results and assess the attestations, keeping the good, tossing the bad. "The fields are ripe" is well attested both in literal contexts (e.g. agricultural reports to the government) and figurative ones (religious/missionary texts). .
    – TimR
    Commented Jan 6, 2017 at 12:08
  • @TRomano It is not a broad statement. If you take a college writing course, do you think the students would present arguments about writing to the professor based on what is googled? I think the rap line: the fields are ripe and the wheat is white is frankly pretty bad. That cannot be googled.
    – Lambie
    Commented Jan 6, 2017 at 16:15

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