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Art style and music create a very mysterious and terrifying atmosphere accurately capturing feelings present during a reading of this short story.

I want to say that a movie's atmosphere captures or rather elicits the exact same feelings that a reader feels while reading the source material. I'm not sure If I am using "present" and "during" correctly here

  • It is very difficult to understand what "Art style and music" means here. Is it "Art, style, and music" or "Art style, and music"? In any case, it is a plural noun phrase, and calls for the plural verb form create. – P. E. Dant Jun 29 '17 at 14:22
  • "Art style and music". You're right, didn't see that s at the end – Delyew Jun 29 '17 at 15:19
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    I probably wouldn't use "capturing" with feelings. I might use "capturing the mood of the short story", but I would use a word like "evoking" with feelings. I will have to think about it some more before I can write a proper answer. Here's an example of "capturing" Short films of Brad Bischoff capture a mood rather than spell out a story – ColleenV parted ways Jun 29 '17 at 16:37
  • @ColleenV +1 for evoke. Another possibility is conjure, as is the OP's own elicit. – P. E. Dant Jun 29 '17 at 16:49
  • Some commas are pleading to join your sentence, particularly in the opening NP. – P. E. Dant Jun 29 '17 at 16:50
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I added some punctuation and articles. I t waws difficult to understand your sentence without them.

Art style and music create a very mysterious and terrifying atmosphere, accurately capturing the feelings present during the reading of this short story.

While "evoke" may be better suited for "feelings", I would change the sentence a bit:

Art style and music create a very mysterious and terrifying atmosphere, accurately capturing the emotions experienced while reading this short story.

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