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I am looking for a different verb, bolded, (or a different way of description) for the following sentence -

"In summary, this work provides a detailed description of the enzyme catalyic mechanism, which provides an important insight into the molecular basis of XYZ disease."

Any help?

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"In summary, this work provides a detailed description of the enzyme catalyic mechanism, which reveals an important insight into the molecular basis of XYZ disease."

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The verb provides appears twice in one sentence.

In summary, this work provides a detailed description of the enzyme catalyic mechanism, which provides an important insight into the molecular basis of XYZ disease.

It would be easy to change the first one, as the second seems correct.

In summary, this work is a detailed description of the enzyme catalyic mechanism, which provides an important insight into the molecular basis of XYZ disease.

Overall the sentence is far too wordy, and you haven't even used the full name of the disease. I recommend keeping the supporting framework for these complicated ideas as simple as possible, for example:

In summary, this work is a detailed description of the enzyme catalyic mechanism, which explains the molecular basis of XYZ disease.

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    You could also replace either instance of provides with gives. – Rob K Aug 14 '17 at 20:16
  • @RobK that is true, please post your own answer. Is mine wrong? – Weather Vane Aug 14 '17 at 20:17
  • @WV, thanks for the feedback. While I agree that the original sentence is wordy, IMO, your first answer is more appropriate than the second, as a description of the "normal mechanism" can only provide insights into a disease process but the description per se cannot explain the basis of a disease process. – B Chen Aug 14 '17 at 21:59

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