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Neighbors pooled their resources, planting different kinds of foods and forming cooperatives.

i think it should have written "planted different kinds of foods and formed cooperatives". what do you think?

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In the original sentence, the neighbors performed one action: they pooled their resources. This means that they planted different kinds of foods and formed cooperatives.

A similar sentence to this would be:

The students decided to collaborate, checking each other's homework and forming study groups.

Your new sentence has the neighbors performing three actions: pooling their resources, planting different kinds of foods, and forming cooperatives.

This is akin to:

The students decided to collaborate, checked each other's homework, and formed study groups.

"The neighbors pooled their resources" is a complete sentence, as are "the neighbors planted different kinds of foods" and "the neighbors formed cooperatives". However, the first sentence uses the planting and forming phrases to clarify exactly how the neighbors pooled their resources. Thus, the three actions are not of equal importance: the most important part of the sentence is that the neighbors pooled their resources; the rest of it is just to clarify.

As a result, though your new sentence is also grammatically correct, the original sentence is stylistically better (edit: in this context).

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  • I want to know more about this kind of sentences. Can you suggest me link or grammar website that contains such kind of sentences and their use. Thank you.
    – user66705
    Feb 6 '18 at 18:36
  • @JeezLouise expresses her opinion about style. It is a personal opinion. If I were editing the text, I would not change either version in favour of the other: they are both clear and they are both idiomatic.
    – JeremyC
    Feb 6 '18 at 23:18
  • It depends on the intent of the author. As the author has written the original, I take that to mean that the author is intending to emphasize that the neighbors pooled their resources and that the other two phrases are secondary. I will edit my answer to clarify that I mean stylistically better in this context.
    – JeezLouise
    Feb 6 '18 at 23:59

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