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I am trying to express an idea but I am not sure it is proper:

I'm writing a letter to someone explaining a situation, but I need to be sure the person will understand.

My sentence is the following:

Mr.V, our yoga teacher, offers the opportunity to non-experienced teachers from Europe, to organize outdoor multiple yoga courses to celebrate summer.

Is this correct? Does it sound natural? Or do I have to write way like this:

Mr V, our yoga teacher, offers to non-experienced teachers from Europe the opportunity to organize (...).

Or even,

Non-experienced teachers from Europe are given the opportunity by Mr V, our yoga teacher, to organize an outdoor multiple yoga course

I have the feeling that English speakers won't understand... Can you?

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  • Wording will depend on whether the letter is making an offer, or is simply describing an existing offer.
    – Stuart F
    Commented Mar 18 at 14:48

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This one is the best: "Mr V, our yoga teacher, offers to non-experienced teachers from Europe the opportunity to organize (...)".

Except... what is an "outdoor multiple yoga course"? That wording is hard to understand. That is the unclear part.

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  • Hi! I'm not sure where to post this, but I wanted to thank you for your answer!
    – LennyD
    Commented Jun 27, 2018 at 18:43
  • PS: An outdoor multiple yoga course is, a yoga course al fresco, and multiple because there are many teachers (the recipient of this email will understand since they use that wording too). thank you again!
    – LennyD
    Commented Jun 27, 2018 at 18:47
  • "Mr V., our yoga teacher, offers to non-experienced teachers from Europe the opportunity to organize multi-instructor outdoor yoga courses to celebrate summer." Commented Jun 28, 2018 at 17:28
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Mr.V, our yoga teacher, offers the opportunity to non-experienced teachers from Europe, to organize outdoor multiple yoga courses to celebrate summer.

Non-experienced is not clear. What experience in particular do they not have?

Our yoga teacher, Mr. V., offers teachers in Europe with no experience in ___________ the opportunity to organize multiple outdoor yoga courses to celebrate summer.

If multiple means "having multiple teachers" then you might consider doing this:

To celebrate summer, our yoga teacher, Mr. V., offers teachers in Europe with no experience in ___________ the opportunity to organize outdoor yoga courses led by multiple instructors.

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