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I am currently writing statement of purpose for my graduate studies and I find myself struggling with a particular turn of phrase.

I'd like to convey (at this point in my letter in a rather abstract fashion) that I have identified features of the particular style of teaching at a certain institution that I believe to be immensely conducive to the development of certain traits that I find indispensable for my ideal scientific career.

I ended up writing:

"... that the guidance I stand to receive at [institution] is perfectly aligned with the scientist that I aspire to become."

Broken down to its components, the sentence above assets that a specific type of "guidance" is in line with "the scientist I aspire to become". I have to admit that I am not perfectly happy with that. I suppose, "guidance" can be in line with traits of a "scientist" but not the "scientist" himself.

So my questions are:

Is the sentence above entirely non-sensical? and (if not) Does it sounds natural to a native speaker's ear?

Would I be better off writing something along the lines of:

"...that the guidance I stand to receive at [institution] will make me best-equipped to become the scientist that I aspire be."

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Your specific concern about this sentence is that the "guidance" can be in line with traits of a "scientist" but not the "scientist" himself.

You can easily refer to the traits rather than to the scientist himself by saying "kind of scientist" or "type of scientist".

You go to an institution to receive an education: this term covers both the subjects in the curriculum and the philosophy or style of teaching at a particular institution. I think that you can reasonably replace the word guidance with education.

I prefer the second sentence, but you could replace make me best equipped with best equip me.

Putting all that together, you would get:

...that the education I stand to receive at [institution] will best equip me to become the kind of scientist that I aspire be."

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