Isn't a conjunction such as as needed bewteen the two bolded clauses? Or, if it is just okay, I want to know why.
The desire for fame has its roots in the experience of neglect, in
injury. No one would want to be famous who hadn’t also, somewhere in
the past, been made to feel extremely insignificant. We sense the need
for a great deal of admiring attention when we have been painfully
exposed to earlier deprivation. Perhaps one’s parents were hard to
impress. They never noticed one much, they were so busy on other
things, focusing on other famous people, unable to have or express
kind feelings, or just working too hard. There were no bedtime stories
and one’s school reports weren’t the subject of praise and admiration.
That’s why one dreams that one day the world will pay attention. When
we’re famous, our parents will have to admire us too (which throws up
an insight into one of the great signs of good parenting: that your
child has no desire to be famous).