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How do I express a person who is both shock and hurt from breakup confession? What is a correct way to say it? ‘his face filled with a mixture of shock and hurt.‘

I feel it is bit weird to write it that way so what is better way to write it?

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‘his face filled with a mixture of shock and hurt.‘

There is a question of what style you prefer to convey. Each alternative has different nuances.

A few possible choices:

  • his expression filled with a mixture of shock and hurt.
  • his countenance filled with a mixture of shock and pain.
  • his expression filled with a mixture of shock and anguish/distress.
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You could reframe it like this -

His face was reflecting an amalgamation of shock and hurt.

He was not only shocked, but also hurt.

His face could not tell if he was more shocked than hurt.

The original sentence doesn't look natural. A reader might surely stumble upon the sentence and think that it is not very well framed. It's best to consider any of the above.

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    Could you edit your post to address OP’s version and explain why you chose your examples? – Em. Aug 4 at 23:08
  • Done. I have edited the post. Please check it – Anurag Mittal Aug 5 at 6:49

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