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I need to say that there arises a question after making some points in my essay, so which one is better?

Here probably arises a pertinent question as to why he would want to be a bio-engineer now, if he didn't like mathematics at school?

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Here probably the pertinent question arises as to why he would want to be a bio-engineer now, if he didn't like mathematics at school?

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Here probably the/a pertinent question arises, "Why would he want to be a bio-engineer now, if he didn't like mathematics at school?

Would it be proper for written American English? Thanks.

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The awkwardness in the three sentences comes from starting with “Here”. One doesn’t say ici apparaît une question pertinente, one says a pertinent question arises here.

The quotes are not appropriate, unless you are actually quoting someone.

That said, more idiomatic verbs would be raise or give rise to:

These points give rise to the pertinent question, why would he want to become a bioengineer now, if he didn't like mathematics in school?

or indeed

These points raise what is doubtless a pertinent question, why would he want to become a bioengineer now, if he didn't like mathematics in school?

(Please don’t fall into the trap of writing ”beg the question”, which in fact means “assuming the conclusion”.)

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  • How about a colon after "question"?
    – Ben Kovitz
    Nov 6, 2019 at 1:04
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  1. Here probably arises a pertinent question as to why he would want to be a bio-engineer now, if he didn't like mathematics at school?

In English, the typical order is subject-verb, and not verb-subject. Switching them: "arises a pertinent question" sounds unusual.

"Here" and "now" seem redundant. They are both saying the same thing. Remove one of them.

"Probably" here makes the writing casual. Sometimes that's ok. If it's intended to be more official, such as an academic paper, or an article, you should perhaps take a firmer stance and not qualify it.

  1. Here probably the pertinent question arises as to why he would want to be a bio-engineer now, if he didn't like mathematics at school?

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  1. Here probably the/a pertinent question arises, "Why would he want to be a bio-engineer now, if he didn't like mathematics at school?

Similar feedback. This is probably the best of the three sentences.

You can't really analyze a sentence like this in isolation. For just simple grammar, okay. But for overall word-choice and balance of the phrasing, the context is important. You should post the preceding paragraph, and subsequent paragraph. Or have a link to an entire page of text.

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  1. Here a pertinent question arises, "Why would he want to be a bio-engineer, if he didn't like mathematics at school?"
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