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Consider these two sentences:

  1. We will update the server to include more space.
  2. We will update the server including more space.

Sentence 1 is the original sentence, but I was asked if sentence 2 could be used instead.

Sentence 2 feels incorrect, but I can’t explain why. If someone could explain to me why S2 is or is not correct I would appreciate it.

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Interestingly enough, we could get away with the change if we used a different verb and added a comma:

  1. We will update the server to add more space.
  2. We will update the server, adding more space.

Both of those are grammatical. The first one explains the purpose for updating the server (to add more space). The second one explains a consequence of updating the server (adding more space).

The only problem with your S2 is that, in the phrase "including more space", the verb include doesn't fit well in that context. Grammatically, though, the verb include could work in different context. For example, a president of a university might say either one of these to the admissions office:

  1. We will accept more applicants to include more international students.
  2. We will accept more applicants, including international students.

The two sentences are not exactly equivalent, though. Once again, S1 states the driving reason for accepting more applicants (the university wants more international students enrolled). S2, on the other hand, clarifies the planned course of action: it's not just local student enrollments that will go up, but international students as well.

  • So there’s no rule or reason why the verb “include” in that aforementioned context does not work? – John Jul 19 at 10:52
  • There is no "rule", but some verbs just don't work well in certain contexts. We paint walls, not vegetables. We don't typically include more space, we add more space. Include is a tricky word, though, because it gets used in contexts like, "We need to by new parts, to include a new alternator." That just means an alternator is on the list of parts we need to buy. Maybe include works better with tangible objects, so that's why it sounds strange with "space"? I'm not sure, though; it's not like we get taught rules like this in middle school. It's more subtle than that. – J.R. Jul 19 at 11:48
  • Lol yeah I hear ya. Thanks a lot for the response. It was helpful. – John Jul 22 at 6:52

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