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After working as a patent agent for more than four years, I aspire to become a patent attorney. Without an educational background in law, I am not qualified to take the bar exam in China. My family and I have soberly weighed the sacrifices that would be required if I studied in the United States. I am willing to do whatever it takes to pursue your JD program; my dream of a better career ___.

I am looking for an expression meaning "depending on you" to fill in the blank.

It is a bit tricky because it is a law school admission essay. I don’t want to sound too emotional like I am begging for your admission. On the other hand, I don’t want to sound too cool-headed. Indeed my dream depends on you. Your program is the only way to realize my dream. Your program means a lot to me. I want to strike a balance.

  • This doesn't answer the question, but I'm not sure that you are writing this correctly. You want them to offer you a place on the course. You need to tell them why it would be good for them to do this. "Because I really really want it" is no reason for them to offer you a place. You should consider whether you want this this in at all. – James K Aug 21 at 13:38
  • So why aren't you studying law in China? I think you need a transition to explain why it's better for you to study law in the US (and then I assume practice in the US). – mkennedy Aug 21 at 19:44
  • Points well taken. :) Thanks for your advice. – luxury20041985 Aug 21 at 21:38
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I am willing to do whatever it takes to pursue your JD program; your program is the key to unlock my dream of a better career.

Not all keys are made of metal; as Wordnik says:

key (noun) a determining factor in accomplishing or achieving something.

Moreover, many English speakers use the verb unlock when they use the word key in this metaphorical sense. For example, you can find books and blog posts with titles like:

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"My dream of a better future depends on you" is correct and idiomatic English. "... is dependent on..." is also possible, and you can slightly de-personalise (and so make more formal) by saying "...on your decision."

However, I would cut it completely. You should be focussed on telling them why they really want to have a student like you, instead of telling them why really want to study with them.

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