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I'm writing a fantasy story, and I have this sentence edited by different persons in different ways. I want to play with the word 'present' and 'gift', meaning 'the present' (no past, no future) is also a gift we should be conscious about. Thank you for your help! A) Time is no longer time as I thought; no past, no future, just the present. Yes, that's it, the present like a gift. B) Time is no longer time as I thought; no past, no future, just the present. Yes, that's it, the present as a gift.

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  • There can be difference between like (similar to) and as (used in the way of) here, but that difference is only there if it's interpreted that way, and it's not enough of a difference to clearly indicate one use over the other. Nov 9 '19 at 12:56
  • Patricia, to me, the clause "Yes, that's it" is used to reinforce a previously stated idea, but it is being used to join together two different ideas ("Time is only the present" and "the present is a gift"). Perhaps you could consider saying "... just the present. The present is a gift." if the character is speaking in a stream of consciousness that they will expand on, or "... just the present. The present as a gift." I agree that there's no large difference here between "like" or "as".
    – CMoney
    Nov 9 '19 at 18:57
  • Thank you, CMoney. I want to show the parallel meaning between 'present' and 'gift,' so I think I'll keep the option B.
    – Patricia
    Nov 9 '19 at 22:31

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