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When writing sentences, I often want to use "and" after "and" between different objects.

See the examples:

  1. When writing stories, I often use a descriptive metaphor and simple and fresh plot to…
  2. Last night, I saw a truck with its logo and black and yellow company name.

So my point is:

First sentence: metaphor and plot, the and in simple and fresh adjective made the first less structure.

Second sentence: logo, and black and yellow company name.

I know they are probably both grammatical. But I am wondering if there are any ways to improve the sentence so that it flows better. Maybe one "and"? Many thanks. Any thoughts will be grateful.

Update: Sorry for being so confusing. In the second sentence, the logo and sign are two objects. I've revised it to company name. Thanks for the advise so far.

  • It might be better to try to find a good way to rephrase your ambiguous sentences. However, in the case like this, and perhaps we couldn't come up with a good alternative, we could try this trick: I often use a descriptive metaphor and simple-and-fresh plot to ..., or I saw a truck with its logo and black-and-yellow company name. – Damkerng T. May 30 '14 at 2:47
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In the first sentence there are a number of connectors that can be used:

  1. as well as
  2. in conjunction with

Additionally, you could keep "and" and just use a comma between the two adjectives: "metaphor and simple, fresh plot to..."

In the second sentence the repeated "and" is almost unavoidable. You could break it up in writing by inserting a comma to clearly separate the constituents: "logo, and black and yellow sign..."

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To improve those 2 specific examples:

  1. When writing stories, I often use a descriptive metaphor with a simple and fresh plot to... OR 1.a When writing stories I often use a descriptive metaphor; a simple and fresh plot to...
  2. Last night, I saw a truck with its black and yellow logo. OR 2a. Last night, I saw a truck with its logo; a black and yellow sign.

The semi colon prevents a comma splice, because the 1st "and" doesn't fit there.

edit: I'm assuming for the 2nd sentence that the black and yellow sign are descriptors of the logo.

  • Adding a semicolon splits the sentence into two discrete but related ideas, which changes the meaning. Using with subordinates plot to metaphor, also changing the meaning. It appears you've missed the question's edit as well (changing sign to company name to clarify that there are two distinct items on the truck). – Esoteric Screen Name May 30 '14 at 2:42

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