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Context: Derek is standing on the top of a scaffold when a man starts shooting at him. Derek doesn't get hit.

  1. Derek throws himself down on the scaffold as the man keeps shooting.

  2. Derek throws himself flat on the scaffold as the man keeps shooting.

  3. Derek throws himself down flat on the scaffold as the man keeps shooting.

  4. Derek drops down on the scaffold as the man keeps shooting.

  5. Derek drops flat on the scaffold as the man keeps shooting.

  6. Derek drops down flat on the scaffold as the man keeps shooting.

Could you please tell me if any of my suggestions are natural in the context?

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  • They all could work. "Throws himself" sounds a little more panicked than "drops". Aug 16 '20 at 2:24
  • Could I just write 'throws himself down" and omit "on the scaffold" or could it sound like he threw himself down from the scaffold?
    – user118626
    Aug 16 '20 at 20:05
  • It could sound like that, since a scaffold is usually elevated. Aug 16 '20 at 20:28
  • To me #4 sounds most natural, but I would suggest “onto” instead of “on”.
    – Rob
    Mar 30 at 4:50
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For me "throws something down" against "drops something" conveys a more (physically) active involvement than just the passive action of gravity.

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