While creatively writing, I found myself dropping an auxiliary verb (I believe?) in a description. The statement went: "He seemed to be a freak of nature, his mutilated feautures artificially altered, his parchment skin impossibly white."
Is this grammatically correct or should it be, "He seemed to be a freak of nature, his mutilated feautures were artificially altered, his parchment skin was impossibly white"?
To me, the second example doesn't really read right, but I honestly don't know whether or not the first one is correct. I couldn't really find an answer online, as I wasn't sure how to word my search (though it's probably better I ask here anyway, because I can show what it is that I'm writing). So, did I write this correctly, or should I word it differently; is it okay to drop auxiliary verbs? (Oh─ and is it 'while creatively writing' or 'while creative writing', haha?)
These may be stupid questions, but I'm a bit confused and could really use some quick help, so forgive me. ♡