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Which one should I use?

The more the foreign worker immerse themselves in the local culture, the more realistic a view they develop of that culture.

The more the foreign worker is immersed in the local culture, the more realistic a view is developed towards that culture.enter image description here https://www.globalcognition.org/what-is-cultural-sensitivity/

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    The first example is NOT grammatical. The second fails to tell the reader who is developing the more realistic view. I wouldn't use either. – Ronald Sole Feb 17 at 20:41
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    It may be that "the develop" is a typo for "they develop". – rjpond Feb 17 at 21:35
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No, they are not grammatical.

Try these:

The more that foreign workers are involved in the local culture, the more realistic their views will be of that culture.

Foreign workers develop realistic views of local culture the more they share in its life.

Immersion in local culture develops realistic views in foreign workers.

A foreign worker will develop realistic cultural views by being immersed in the life of the community.

If foreign workers are immersed in local life, they will develop realistic views of that culture.

Immersion in local life develops realistic views in foreign workers.

For foreign workers, involvement in local life goes hand-in-hand with having realistic opinions of their adopted culture.

Immersion in local life develops realistic opinions in foreign workers.

So, what was problematic about the example sentences? Subject-verb agreement was one problem.

The other problem comes from the word immersion. Think of it this way:

The more drowned a person is, the worse.

One is either immersed or not immersed.

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