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I'm organising a yoga retreat and longing to write a nice shiny overview of the program.

Does the following sound stylistically appropriate to your ears?

Tetyana is educated in South India and practised Hatha yoga with one of the leading teachers, Pranam Yoga Joseph (Sivavanda system and BKS lyengar). She has 7 years of yoga practice. Also, Tetyana has a medical degree.

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  • Do you have a specific question? This looks like a request for proofreading.
    – stangdon
    Feb 24, 2021 at 16:15
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    Well, the medical degree beats out yoga in most bios. Anyway, "was educated", not is.
    – Lambie
    Feb 24, 2021 at 16:15

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I would write it like this:

Tetyana was educated in South India and practised Hatha yoga with one of its leading teachers, Pranam Yoga Joseph (Sivavanda system and BKS lyengar). Tetyana has practiced yoga for 7 years and also has a medical degree.

I would also possibly replace “with” with “under”, though I’m not sure if it would be appropriate in that context.

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