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One of the cops escorts Tim out of the house and toward a police car. Curious neighbors have gathered outside. Tim spits on the cop (who's) escorting him.

  1. Is "escorts" the more natural choice of verb to use in this context?

  2. Is the emboldened sentence phrased naturally without adding "who's"?

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    What do you think? What are your doubts? How many cops does Tim spit at/on? You should be able to work this out yourself. Mar 19 '21 at 0:02
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"Escort" is a good verb to use:

To accompany (a person) in order to compel them to go somewhere (e.g. to leave a building).

There are two ways to create a modifying phrase: you can use a particple phrase "the cop escorting him" or a relative clause "the cop who is escorting him" both are possible, it is up to you which one to choose.

The tense of the story is rather unusual. It is written as if a person is recording what they see as they see it. It would be be less marked to use the past tense: "One of the cops escorted Tim....". You may also want to change the focus to Tim "Tim was escorted ... by one one of the cops"

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