I am writing for an IELTS practice test. The question is to describe the changes that is going to be done in an airport. Grammerly marks the following sentence as intricate! I am curious to know if it is really intricate for a native speaker?
In the southwestern part of the building, a check-in desk and a bag-drop will be introduced, along with another cafe, an atm, and car hire on the opposite side.
Could you imagine what are the changes in an airport from my sentence?
Another version that I can come with is this:
In the southwestern part of the building, a check-in desk and a bag-drop will be introduced, while another cafe, an atm, and car hire will be added on the opposite side.
Is it easier to understand?
Update
Actually I want to know if it is clear where the opposite side is? and which items are located there?
I wanted to mention that these two items are going to be built at left.
- check-in desk
- a bag-drop
While these three items will be added at right.
- a cafe
- an ATM
- a car hire
Is it clear from the text?
By the way, I say another cafe because I have already mentioned in the text that a cafe is located at left.