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I am applying for a Ph.D. program. I am writing Statement of Purpose and Objectives. So in the first sentence, I want to introduce my education background. My first sentence is:

As a highly motivated student with a strong multidisciplinary background, with degrees from journalism to economics to mathematics and statistics, with over five years of academic experience in research, analyzing public and private data, and running statistical analysis, I am confident that I would be a successful Ph.D. student and researcher in the biostatistics field.

I know from...to...to is wrong here. But how to change?

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    I'm not convinced that it is wrong! But you didn't tell us what you actually want to say, so it's hard to know how to "correct" it. Do you actually have three or four undergraduate degrees?!
    – stangdon
    Sep 14 at 13:45
  • And were the disciplines you mention all degree majors or honours degrees or master's degrees.. You need to be much more specific, as stangdon says. Sep 14 at 13:48
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    @stangdon What I want to say is my breadth of knowledge. My undergraduate degree is journalism. I have 3 masters: 2 econ, 1 math and stats. So that's why I am using from...to...to... here.
    – Mariana
    Sep 14 at 14:06
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    Be elegant, be simpler: with degrees in journalism, economics, mathematics and statistics. It's fine not to specify graduate/undergraduate at this point.
    – Lambie
    Sep 14 at 15:53
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Although it's common in marketing language, I would avoid the construction from...to for discrete items that can't be thought of as points on a line or spectrum.

You don't mention how many degrees you hold, but if it's no more than the four you mention you'd probably be best off simply listing them:

As a highly motivated student with a strong multidisciplinary background, with degrees in journalism, economics, mathematics and statistics...

If you hold an exceptionally large number of degrees, a list of which would break the flow of the sentence, you could give an abridged list:

As a highly motivated student with a strong multidisciplinary background, with degrees including journalism, economics, mathematics and statistics...

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  • I really appreciate your help!
    – Mariana
    Sep 14 at 23:56

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