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For an exam answer, I was required to write a letter to invite my friends to my city. I have some specific queries about it, but I've put the whole thing for some context. The problem phrases are in bold.

Dear Sussane, David & Joshua

I am excited to receive you all on Sunday next week at Hyderabad Airport Central. Therefore, there isn't any need to worry about logistics from airport to my home.

Let me share the vacation plan that you would think of spending here. This city has an history of Nizam Royal Family, whose heritage is left behind 400 years ago. Some of the obvious destinations that has to be visited are Charminar, Golconda Fort, Falaknuma Palace & Ramoji Film City.

Hyderabad hosts a Zoological park. Therefore, You could think of coming with children for this trip. Children can have some learning experience at Salarjung museum. > For a comfortable trip this would not consume more than 4 days. Therefore, Please plan accordingly and make me informed before starting from there.

Yours lovely,

Rebecca

My question:

1) Can i address the recipients with multiple names, when i write a letter? by saying Dear A, B & C

2) Could i use a better phrase than saying left behind?

3) Can the heritage destinations be mentioned with Initial Capitalise letter? for example: Charminar Zoological

4) Can i better the wind-up statement at the end of the letter? Looks like I did not phrase it concisely before starting from there.

  • It is possible that you will need to split this question into multiple queries, but this seems a better fir in ELL – overexchange Jul 28 '14 at 16:53
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(1) You can definitely address more than one person in the salutation. I would personally write out "and" and not use an ampersand.

(2) ...whose lineage dates back 400 years.

(3) If zoological park is part of the name, it's capitalized: The Miami Metro Zoo.

(4) I don't understand what you mean by "before starting from there."

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    I wonder if "before starting from there" is: Please let me know your desires before you leave. (In other words, before the trio begins their journey to visit). – J.R. Jul 29 '14 at 0:11
  • Good point. I think you may be right. – CocoPop Jul 29 '14 at 0:37
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    @J.R. 'desires' look a bit awkward, may be i did not listen this word much in meetings for past 10 years – overexchange Jul 29 '14 at 3:52
  • @CocoPop yes you are right, before my friends start from their place. BTW am always confused in usage of their and there. – overexchange Jul 29 '14 at 3:53
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    @overexchange - Please let me know your thoughts before you leave would be an excellent way to write it. Sounds very natural and understandable to me. – J.R. Jul 29 '14 at 8:43

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