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Consider the following toy example:

Chess is a board game. More precisely, there are 2 players. There is an 8 by 8 grid. There are 6 kinds of pieces. There are...

It seems to me that the scope of more precisely should cover the multiple sentences that follow it, but not just there are 2 players. I wish I could write something like this:

Chess is a board game. More precisely: {There are 2 players. There is an 8 by 8 grid. There are 6 kinds of pieces. There are...}

This problem sometimes bothers me, especially when I am writing academic articles, where a term has two different discriptions, one is more concise, and the other often in multiple simple sentences, and I want to connect the first concise description of the term with its multi-sentence explanantion by an adverbial phrase such as more precisely. What are some good ways I can do this?

I know that the toy example is not a good illustration of the above, but I can't think of an example at hand that is not too technical. Something similar would be this: First define an adjective chessy to mean every property of the chess game. Then the example becomes:

Chess is a chessy game. More precisely, there are 2 players. There is an 8 by 8 grid. There are 6 kinds of pieces. There are...

Some simple (but not satisfactory) workarounds I can think of are:

  • using point form
  • using a descriptive sentence after the adverbial phrase:

Chess is a chessy game. More precisely, the following properties hold for the chess game. There are 2 players. There is an 8 by 8 grid. There are...

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  • To me, the obvious solution would be to make it all one sentence: More precisely, a game for two players, played on an 8x8 grid with six kinds of pieces... Jul 29, 2022 at 9:36
  • @KateBunting That's what maybe works for this specific example, but often it just is much more natural to write it in multiple sentences.
    – durianice
    Jul 29, 2022 at 12:38
  • What is "point form"? Does that mean bullet points? If so, why do you find it unsatisfactory? Aug 7, 2022 at 17:08
  • @MarcInManhattan Yes, I do mean bullet points. It is sometimes unsatisfactory because it takes a lot of space, and is usually used for very important things. Imagine if you just want to mention some not-so-related examples in a paragraph (to give pointers to readers for example). You can't use bullet points for that.
    – durianice
    Aug 8, 2022 at 11:14

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I suggest you just use semicolons instead of periods to separate the assertions following more precisely.

That way, the orthography more explicitly indicates a "whole sentence" adverbial usage applying to all clauses within that "extended" sentence.

Bear in mind that this is purely a matter of "finnicky" orthography. There's no equivalent in real (spoken) English, so imho that means it's not very important anyway.

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