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I've been told the following caption for a video about deglaciation looks awkward,

"Highly impressive footage of the effects of climate change that is not happening wink wink"

because of the

"the effects of climate change that is not happening"

part.

There I want to ironically contrast (thus the wink wink) the fact everyone seem to avoid such an important topic as the climate change.

Thanks in advance

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  • I’ve edited your question in the hopes of making it specific enough to be re-opened. Commented Oct 10, 2014 at 19:56
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    For me, some of the awkwardness comes from expecting a number agreement here: “the effects of climate change that is not happening” (even though the lack of agreement is ultimately seen as correct). I think some punctuation would help the situation a lot, and StoneyB’s addition of a comma and the word “which” is a good start. This might be a good situation for em dashes to indicate self-interruption or an aside. “. . .which is, of course, not happening—wink wink!” Commented Oct 10, 2014 at 20:04

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I don't see anything particularly awkward in your sentence; but the rhetorical effect might be a little stronger if you wrote:

Highly impressive footage of the effects of climate change, which of course is not happening wink wink.

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