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Children’s endeavor and growth are valuable just like their success and it is not only successes that are scored, but also efforts and progress [are also scored].

Is it correct to omit the the last part inside brackets, given the fact that the verb "scored" is already used in the sentence?

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    Leve it out, it's fine. – Stephie Jan 13 '15 at 10:31
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    For a nicer sentence, I would recommend "...but so are efforts and progress." – M.A.R. Jan 13 '15 at 16:53
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    Also "...but also their efforts and progress." – user3169 Jan 13 '15 at 17:18
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Yes it is correct - and reads much more naturally.

I would put a comma after the first "success" like this, and insert "their" as suggested by @user3169:

Children’s endeavor and growth are valuable just like their success, and it is not only successes that are scored, but also their efforts and progress.

Note that the use of the word "endeavor" here is quite correct, but it is unusual.

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    I think you want also before their? – StoneyB Feb 7 '15 at 16:09

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