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Can I use the word 'signal' in the following sentence? If not, how am I supposed to phrase it? I have no ideas.

She told us she did notice that he tried in many times and in many ways to send her signals that he secretly liked her.

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    Looks good to me... you could probably omit the in before many times.
    – Catija
    Feb 16, 2015 at 16:01
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    What @Catija said. In fact you mustn't include that first in, since it's grammatically invalid. Feb 16, 2015 at 16:06

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If you remove the in before many times, then your sentence is fine. What you have written uses signal in a common and standard way.

She told us she did notice that he tried many times and in many ways to send her signals that he secretly liked her.

However, you might also consider using signal as a verb. Doing so does not change the meaning of your sentence, but does affect the way it feels.

She told us she did notice that he tried many times and in many ways to signal that he secretly liked her.

I think this reads a bit better. In many ways fits better here with signal than send to my eye, and this version sounds a little more active.

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She had noticed his liking for her by various indications.

Simple and right to the point. Using 'signal' here, may reduce the sophistication of what you are trying to convey.

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    I disagree that your version is simple; its diction is unnecessarily complex. It also changes the meaning. No longer is he actively and intentionally trying to convey his affections. Instead, she noticed for reasons unknown. Feb 17, 2015 at 17:25
  • She told us she did notice that he tried in many times and in many ways to send her signals that he secretly liked her. It happened sometime in the past. If my answer fulfills the purpose, then it is as good an answer, irrespective of the simplicity. Feb 18, 2015 at 13:03
  • My remark has nothing to do with the tense. "He tried ... to send her signals" tells us that he did something, but "she had noticed his liking for her by various indications" doesn't. With the latter, we have no idea what those indications are, but the former specifies them (they are the signals). Your suggestion changes the meaning, hence the downvote. Feb 18, 2015 at 15:36
  • How can she notice indications unless something happened in the first place? It is implicit that she made the statement because of such occurrences. No longer is he actively and intentionally trying to convey his affections. states that we are discussing about some current action, which is contradictory in this scenario. Down vote was unasked for, since my answer, answers the question. She had noticed his interest in her through his various actions. Feb 18, 2015 at 18:25

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