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To avoid the repetition of using as, I decide to replace it with being:

As you can see, I find a pleasure in helping community. At the same time, being a person who work in science, I also find the need to do everything productivity and efficiency.

Is it grammatically correct? Can it also work with other verbs (e.g. working in the science)?

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Although "being" is not ungrammatical, it is not an improvement over "as" there.


Some other corrections:

  • We "find pleasure in" rather than "find a pleasure in..."
  • helping the community
  • person who works
  • And in the final sentence of your example, you need adverbs, not nouns:

    do everything productively and efficiently

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    "Being" is neither particularly better nor worse than "as". If he just used "as" in the previous sentence, he might want to use "being" just to add variety to the text. Or vice versa. – Jay Jul 1 '15 at 15:30
  • Also, I think "a person who works in science" is a little awkward. I'd be more likely to say, "a person who works in a scientific field" or "a person who works in the sciences". Maybe others disagree, this is pretty subjective. – Jay Jul 1 '15 at 15:32
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    @Jay: it's a matter of style, which is subjective, but I find "being a person who" a far greater infelicity than a repeated "as". (books.google.com/ngrams/…) – Tᴚoɯɐuo Jul 1 '15 at 15:38

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