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The forest seemed endless. Either that or we were going in circles; it seemed like the same trees kept passing by, like the looped backgrounds in old cowboy chasing scenes. Just as I was about to lose hope, though, the trees cleared away, and Tom and I found ourselves in a small valley.

Two people told me that I don't need the though. But, I don't know, I feel it's necessary to add one, because the sentence is saying: "We were going in circles and I was about to give up, but I finally didn't because we found our way out."

Or maybe I'm wrong?

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I think it sounds natural with "though". Placed where it is, though imparts a conversational quality to the story. If it were placed at the beginning of the sentence, the effect would be less conversational:

Though just as I was about to lose hope, the trees cleared away...

P.S. We call them "chase scenes".

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  • Exactly what I was going to say.
    – TBridges42
    Jul 31, 2015 at 13:48
  • Thanks for the answer. You mean I should remove the cowboy part?
    – wyc
    Jul 31, 2015 at 14:29
  • what is the chase sense ? As I know, we use "though" and "although" in adverbial clauses. what do you mean effect is less conversational ? Are you refer to informal speech ? And , the final question, P.S stands for what ? :)
    – Cardinal
    Jul 31, 2015 at 14:51
  • @Cardinal: P.S. = postscript. The OP wrote: "...like the looped backgrounds in old cowboy chasing[sic] scenes".
    – TimR
    Jul 31, 2015 at 18:33
  • @alexchenco: You can keep the cowboy part. It was good. I just meant that we don't call them "chasing" scenes but "chase scenes".
    – TimR
    Jul 31, 2015 at 18:35
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If you were telling this story in casual spoken English, you could certainly use "though" here the way you have it. However, in writing I would recommend you use however or but at the beginning of the sentence:

However, just as I was about to lose hope, the trees cleared away...

If it were me telling or writing the story, I would personally use then followed by a pause:

Then, just as I was about to lose hope, ...

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  • So you also think that the sentence would sound weird without the "though"?
    – wyc
    Jul 31, 2015 at 12:20
  • It would sound fine with "though," but it would read better without it.
    – CocoPop
    Jul 31, 2015 at 12:22
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I agree with the above. There seems enough change in the action that "though" is a good support in the narrative (else I would just remove it).

Also, I would add a comma after "Either that" .

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