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The production of wine will be divided into a 50% given by X and Y, a 20% given by W and V, and a 30% given by Z

Each percentage contains one or two kinds that make it up. I am unsure whether the usage of divided into and given by sounds weird or not. I am not even sure whether putting a before the percentage is fine. Bullet lists are not an option, but radically restructuring the sentence is fine.

  • You should avoid divided into, which is ordinarily a way of expressing the mathematical operation. Are you speaking here of the sources of the wine or its destinations? – StoneyB on hiatus Aug 20 '15 at 20:43
  • What do the letters represent? Donors? Vineyards? Variables in mathematical formulas? Something else? – Nathan Tuggy Aug 20 '15 at 20:43
  • If you want to use the phrase "divided into", it would be more normal to say "will be divided into three parts, 50% ...". However, I don't understand what you mean by "given by X and Y", so there is still something odd about this sentence. Do you mean that the wine, once produced, will be divided? Or that the responsibility/expectation to produce wine is split among three groups, and their output will be combined? – Wim Lewis Aug 20 '15 at 21:06
  • I am trying to say that elements X and Y together will contribute for 50% to the total, W and V will contribute for 30%, etc... I concur it's very unclear what I am trying to say. – gd1 Aug 21 '15 at 8:47
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If V, W, X, Y, and Z are suppliers or types of input (e.g., varieties of grapes):

  • The wine will comprise 50% from X and Y; 20% from W and V, and 30% from Z.

If V, W, X, Y, and Z are customers or destinations:

  • The wine will be {divided/distributed} among V, W, X, Y, and Z as follows: 50% to X and Y; 20% to W and V; 30% to Z.

None of these make sense to me; I would want to know what the individual percentages will be for each of the terms. Because "50% {from/to} X and Y" could mean, say, 1% X and 49% Y, or 25% X and 25% Y, or 49% X and 1% Y. Do you really mean to leave that much leeway/uncertainty?

  • They're types of input, more precisely different vine varieties. I don't have access to non-aggregated data so X and Y are summed together, I am afraid. Thanks! :) – gd1 Aug 22 '15 at 18:43
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I'll go with: "The wine production will be composed of a 50% of X and Y, a 20% of W and V, and a 30% of Z"

  • Bad usage of "comprised". Try "will comprise" or "will be composed of". If you must, use the bastardized but common "comprised of". But definitely not "comprised by". books.google.com/ngrams/… – Brian Hitchcock Aug 21 '15 at 11:24
  • Thanks @Brian Hitchcock, I edited my answer with your recomendations. – st4ck4nd Aug 21 '15 at 12:02

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