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I wrote this sentence:

In the subsequent sections, after reviewing the existing approaches, we present our approach and then an algorithm to implement it.

Should I break the sentence into two sentences, like "... and then an algorithm to implement it is presented"? or I can write it as above?

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  • I think "and" is a coordinator not a cinjunction
    – Cardinal
    Aug 22, 2015 at 12:39
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    @Cardinal It's a matter of what grammatical sect you're in communion with. Traditional grammar calls and a "coordinating conjunction". Aug 22, 2015 at 12:46
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    Instead of using and then, you could use followed by, which sounds better in my opinion.
    – Vlammuh
    Aug 22, 2015 at 12:48

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Your sentence is grammatically unexceptionable, and conforms to the prevailing second-rate academic taste for superfluous repetition and subordination.

Why do you have three distinct terms signifying sequence—subsequent, after, then? None of them is needed: the sequence is evident in the bare conjunction. Me, I like things simpler:

We review the existing approaches, define our own approach, and offer an algorithm for implementing it.

If your 'sections' are numbered you can make things even clearer for readers:

Section 2 reviews existing approaches, Section 3 defines our own approach, and Section 4 offers an algorithm for implementing it.

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  • Thank you for advice, but you admit that my conjunction with "and then" is ok! however I myself prefer your style now.
    – Ahmad
    Aug 22, 2015 at 13:08
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    @Ahmad Your English is very good, and your instinct when you're unsure is usually sound. I think you've read enough and imitated enough that you're ready to throw away your models and concentrate on writing: making things as easy as possible for your readers to understand. Save the complex constructions for when they're needed to express complex ideas. Aug 22, 2015 at 13:15

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