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Innovative locals, resting in the doldrums of off-season winter, noticed that when the large, ancient pipe leaked, escaping water coated the high walls of the gorge in spectacular ice."

Could the bold part of the sentence be reformed like this?

... which is resting in the doldrums of off-season winter ...

  • Not "is", but maybe "are"... – Victor Bazarov Sep 15 '15 at 20:29
  • I've responded to your comment below, but SE won't let me put your name in it - there seems to be a system-wide block on characters because of spam attacks. – StoneyB Sep 16 '15 at 10:40
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First, three errors:

  • The relative clause refers to people ('locals'), not things, so the relativizer should be who, not which
  • They are multiple people, so the verb must be plural are, not singular is
  • The main clause is in the past tense (noticed), so the relative clause should probably be in the past tense, too—unless you mean explicitly that these locals are resting in the wintertime now, at some time after they noticed the ice.

    ... who were resting in the doldrums of off-season winter ...

Your rewrite of this participle clause (it's called that because the verb which heads it is a present participle) as a relative clause has similar meaning to the original, but not quite the same meaning.

The relative clause says the same thing about the locals—that they were resting during the winter when they noticed; but the resting is (as far as we can tell) incidental to the action of the main clause, which is their noticing the ice coating the walls of the gorge. The participle clause, however, suggests more strongly that it was in some sense because they were resting during the wintertime that they noticed the ice. Presumably, during the offseason doldrums they had a lot of leisure time on their hands when they could examine the landscape.

  • Why you add a "their" after "which is"? Is it correct grammatically? I guess it refers to "which is +noun/gerund" right? – 오준수 Sep 16 '15 at 4:45
  • Yes. "The action" (noun) is "their noticing" (gerund clause). – StoneyB Sep 16 '15 at 10:35

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