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I wish to construct this sentence in a better manner, avoiding the repeated use of principle. Yet doing away with the repeated word principle in each bullet point will cause the principle name to be read differently.

Suggestions?

UI design principles focus on improving the quality of user interface design. Some of these principles include:

  • Structure principle
  • Simplicity principle
  • Visibility principle
  • Tolerance principle
  • Feedback principle
  • Reusability principle
  • You want betterment in 'sentence' or bullet points? And you didn't use the word 'principle' multiple times in your sentence. It's in the bullets. Clarify please – Maulik V Oct 13 '15 at 6:19
  • Any will do...but my concern is that if i remove the repeated "principle" in the bullets, the meaning of the bullets might be changed. – Mamta D Oct 13 '15 at 6:22
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    The sentence includes the bullets as it has a colon and the bullets are in continuation. So it is a single sentence including bullets. Surely, that does not deserve a downvote. – Mamta D Oct 13 '15 at 6:23
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    In the list, is the word "principle" part of an actual nomenclature for the list items? If so, I don't think you can change them. – user3169 Oct 13 '15 at 6:25
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    @MaulikV The bullet points occur within the sentence. They are an asyndetic coordination of noun phrases constituting the Direct Object of the verb INCLUDE. So I'm afraid that Matma D did use repeated instances of the word principle in their sentence. – Araucaria Oct 13 '15 at 15:07
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Instead of having a multiple co-ordination of entire noun phrases, the Original Poster could just use a co-ordination of modifiers with a single head noun:

UI design principles focus on improving the quality of user interface design. These principles include the Structure, Simplicity, Visibility, Tolerance, Feedback, and Reusability principles.

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I'd do it this way...

UI design principles focus on improving the quality of user interface design.

The list of some of the principles --

Structure
Simplicity
Visibility
Tolerance
Feedback
Reusability

OR

The principles of -

Structure
Simplicity
Visibility
Tolerance
Feedback
Reusability

  • But that is exactly what I DON'T want. I have clearly mentioned that in my question. – Mamta D Oct 13 '15 at 6:15
  • The only way to remove a common word in bullet points is to make it a headline/title and then describe the rest. If you don't want this, I'm not sure what do you want to express. – Maulik V Oct 13 '15 at 6:18
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I think you can leave out the second "principle". It is implied.

Some of these include:

As for dealing with the list items, you might write:

UI design principles focus on improving the quality of user interface design. This might include the following types:

Structure
Simplicity
Visibility
Tolerance
Feedback
Reusability

I am guessing with "types", since I don't know your context in detail. But some synonym of "principles" needs to go here.

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I think the best way to go about this is to either retain it as is or else add a small blurb in front of each bullet point so that the repetition is camouflaged as given in this article.

UI design principles focus on improving the quality of user interface design. Some of these include:

  • Structure principle:

    (paragraph body)

  • Simplicity principle:

    (paragraph body)

  • Visibility principle:

    (paragraph body)

  • Tolerance principle:

    (paragraph body)

  • Feedback principle

    (paragraph body)

  • Reusability principle

    (paragraph body)

  • That's what it is, the original. What change you brought in? Did you consider another option - The principles of... and then listing them all. – Maulik V Oct 13 '15 at 6:53
  • I didn't mention that change was mandatory. I asked for suggestions. Since none of your suggestions were valid, I have mentioned two approaches - one, retain as is. Second, add a blurb or paragraph body. – Mamta D Oct 13 '15 at 6:59

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