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She slammed the door behind her.
Nice girl. With her gone, though, the air felt a few pounds lighter.

Many people had said that the though is unnecessary. However, this is how I read it: The girl slammed the door (a rough action). She was a nice girl (sarcasm), but I had to admit that the tension dissipated once she was gone.

So the though corresponds to the but. Or maybe I'm mistaken?

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Though seems odd to me in this context. If nice girl is sarcasm, the writer was glad to see her go. The "lightening of the air" is congruent with that thought, so it does not call for a contrastive word such as though.

I think it would make more sense rendered thus:

  • And with her gone, the air felt a few pounds lighter.
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This is more about style and semantics, not about grammar.

Grammar-wise, there is nothing wrong here.

But:

Though implies a contradiction, a deviation from the expectation or the norm. Logically you would expect the tension to go away when an unpleasant person leaves. If you add the though, you express a contradicting expectation: A surprise that "the air felt a few pound lighter".

As we don't know what you want so say - the above could be your intention, after all - it's hard to say "it's wrong". If you simply wanted to express "girl gone -> tension gone as expected", dump the though.

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