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Recently I have been trying to file a complaint where I need to include the following:

(All texts in the following blockquote are red-colored)

Click next after 15 secs

Click next after 14 secs

Click next after 13 secs

Click next after 1 secs

The line flashing on the screen keeps changing every passing second like given above.

I tried to describe that in the email:

I notice that while we are on the page where we have to enter the names of the passengers, it flashes 'Click Next after xx secs' in red with a clock attached with the text where xx goes from 15 -> 0

That is pretty awkward and not very clear and visual. What would be the best way to write the same?

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  • @Ϻ.Λ.Ʀ. I am not asking you to proofread it. I am asking you how do I go about saying the same thing. Normally, we are asked to show some effort about what we have tried and why we do not think our wording is not applicable. If you notice carefully, I have written in my last line that the way I have written is pretty awkward and doesn't seem like a natural way a native speaker would speak about it. – Jony Agarwal Jan 2 '16 at 12:46
  • Well, you're looking for writing advice and proofreading and that's the difference. Writing advice is off-topic too. – M.A.R. Jan 2 '16 at 12:48
  • That's also off-topic. I don't see your point there. – M.A.R. Jan 2 '16 at 12:57
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On the passenger name entry screen, there is a 15 second countdown flashing in red "Click Next after ** secs".

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This is a tricky bug to describe in a single sentence. Try using multiple sentences.

For example:

There is a bug on the page where we have to enter the names of the passengers. It flashes 'Click next after x secs' in red. 'X' counts down from 15 to 0.

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  • General tips for reporting bugs (I'm a software tester): – user28297 Jan 1 '16 at 14:54
  • Explain why this bug is a problem (is it annoying? does the page time out after 15 seconds?), what causes it to happen (is it every time you're entering names?), and what software you're using (Chrome? Firefox? Windows? Mac? Which version?) – user28297 Jan 1 '16 at 14:57
  • It's not about the bug. I have described it pretty well. I just need to know how do I write the count down thing in a clear fashion. – Jony Agarwal Jan 1 '16 at 17:46
  • +1 for "try using multiple sentences" and the clear example of that approach. – Tᴚoɯɐuo Jan 2 '16 at 13:17
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On the page where we enter the names of passengers, a red-text alert flashes "Click next after X secs" every second, from 15 down to one.

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You could write:

When I have to enter the names of passengers, there is some flashing red text that reads "Click next after 15 secs" - which is updated every second counting down from fifteen seconds to one second.

Where fifteen is 15 and one is 1.

This is the best way to write it in my opinion.

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On the screen where we enter passenger names, there flashes a warning in red text: "Click next after 15 secs" where the number of remaining seconds counts down each second to zero.

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