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Can I use "while" after "In addition"?

In addition, while reuniting elder parents with their migrant children seems an attractive proposition, it is so different from expectation in long term.

Is my sentence grammatically Ok?

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  • You might add why you think there is a conflict between while and In addition.
    – user3169
    Commented Feb 29, 2016 at 5:41
  • The "it is so different from expectation in long term" isn't right. ("in long term" has to be "in the long term" or preferably more like "over the long term"). "it is so different" doesn't fit here either. What you're looking for may be something more like "In addition, while reuniting elder parents with their migrant children seems an attractive proposition, the realities over the long term may not live up to the expectations." Commented Feb 29, 2016 at 5:50

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In addition, while reuniting elder parents with their migrant children seems an attractive proposition, it is so different from the expectation in the long term.

In addition is just used to connect this statement with a previous one. It is not really related to either phrase being joined, and shouldn't result in any conflict with the words in them.

For example:

I want to go to the beach tomorrow. In addition, I want to look for seashells.

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  • Actually this sentence is a part of a longer essay. I have mentioned some statement in the previous paragraphs and i want to write a new one with this sentence.
    – Mike
    Commented Feb 29, 2016 at 5:46
  • Then you should add a previous statement to your question, as the relationship between the two statements will guide what connecting phrase you can use.
    – user3169
    Commented Feb 29, 2016 at 6:03

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