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I am new to English language. I drafted an e-mail to university requesting the information regarding my offer letter. Also, how can I politely ask to make things done quickly, so that I may apply for visa well in time.

Subject: International postgraduate applicant: unconditional offer status

Dear Sir,

I am writing to know the status of my request for issue of an unconditional offer of MSc Electrical Engineering course, starting in October, 2103.

I have submitted all relevant documents by an email on June 14, 2013.

May I kindly request the information regarding the expected date by which CAS number and the unconditional offer will be issued.

Thanking you.

Warm regards,

Xyz Abc (Application reference no...)

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Here are the changes I would make for a formal email:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to know ask for confirmation of the status of my request for the issue of an unconditional offer of a place on your MSc Electrical Engineering course, starting in October, 2103 2013.

I have submitted all the relevant documents by an email on June 14, 2013.

May I kindly request Could you please send me the information regarding the expected date by which the CAS number and the unconditional offer will be issued.?

I would appreciate any efforts you are able to make in expediting this process, so that I am able to submit my visa application in good time.

Thanking you for your assistance.

Warm regards,

Xyz Abc (Application reference no...)

Caveat: I am a native British English speaker. It's possible that cultural norms in e.g. the US are different in ways that I'm not aware of.

  • Proof reading questions are off-topic. Rather than answering then, you should flag them to get them closed (flag >> it doesn't belong here, or it is a duplicate… >> off-topic because... >> Proofreading questions are off-topic unless a specific source of concern in the text is clearly identified. See: Alternative websites for proofreading). – kiamlaluno Jul 25 '13 at 11:49
  • @ZeroPiraeus: Thank you a lot. That really helped me. – Tim Jul 25 '13 at 16:17

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