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It's been a long time since I checked my English, and I feel like I might not be sounding like a native or it's too flat, I'd like to know what is wrong with the following comment (even slight mistakes, or if it doesn't sound like an American native English speaker), and how I can improve it:

I've been bombarded by a lot of people saying that Angular was lighter than jQuery on some tasks, and I set out for testing Angular's performance and I've been quite unsatisfied with it, but people still hammer on that, that's why I asked for facts, and I know that here on SO, I would find solid and backed up information, not just opinions

  • Even my question is open to judgements :) – Kyle Mar 10 '16 at 20:53
  • I would recommend lang-8.com to get folks to look over your writing. This sort of review is really outside the scope of ELL. – ColleenV parted ways Mar 10 '16 at 21:08
  • @ColleenV I don't know if there are grammar errors on it as well – Kyle Mar 10 '16 at 21:12
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    Looks like a run-on sentence... I'd try to split it up. – legowave440 Mar 10 '16 at 21:21
  • @legowave440 yeah, I see that now, it's like a blob – Kyle Mar 11 '16 at 11:15
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Try splitting the sentence up into several sentences with a few additional transitions and punctual elements. This would give it a more natural sound:

I've been bombarded by a lot of people saying that Angular was lighter than jQuery on some tasks. As a result, I set out for testing Angular's performance and have been quite unsatisfied with it. Nevertheless, people still hammer on that; that's why I asked for facts. I know that here on SO, I would find solid and backed up information--not just opinions.

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Well, I can honestly say I have no clue what this sentence is saying, but that's just because I'm extremely ignorant on the subject! :p

Grammar-wise, I would change "set out for testing" to either "set out to test" or just "tested" if that would still make sense with your meaning.

This may be nitpicking, but I would put a period after performance (and of course, drop the "and").

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