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At first, when I was writing the intro for this IELTS question, it went:

The line chart illustrates the proportion of New Zealand’s population growth in different age groups from 1950 to 2000 and makes projections for the year 2050.

But then I felt like it was too long a sentence, so I tried chunking it by adding a comma. However, I'm not sure if the following structure is grammatically correct:

The line chart illustrates the proportion of New Zealand’s population growth in different age groups from 1950 to 2000, and also making projections for the year 2050.

Thank you so much in advance!

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    No, it;s incorrect. You need "and also makes ...".
    – BillJ
    Commented Mar 13 at 7:34
  • So the following sentence must be incorrect too, isn't it? "The given line graph depicts the breakdown of the New Zealand population divided into 4 age groups starting in 1950, and including projections to the year 2050." Commented Mar 13 at 12:12
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    Yes, it's incorrect. The respective verb phrases are not parallel. You need "depicts ..." and "includes projections ...". OR "depicts ..., including" projections ...".
    – BillJ
    Commented Mar 13 at 13:17

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The line chart [illustrates the proportion of New Zealand’s population growth in different age groups from 1950 to 2000] and [makes projections for the year 2050].

The line chart [illustrates the proportion ...] and [makes projections ...].

The phrases in brackets are parallel, and we need the present simple makes to maintain parallelism.

Adding the comma and also is fine, but the present simple makes is needed.

A different construction is possible if you must use the gerund-participle making:

The line chart illustrates the proportion of New Zealand’s population growth in different age groups from 1950 to 2000, making projections for the year 2050.

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    +1 Yes, I agree!
    – BillJ
    Commented Mar 13 at 12:48

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