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I saw a sentence in the Collins English Dictionary:

He had squirmed and wriggled and screeched when his father had washed his face.

I rarely see a sentence which uses the past perfect tense both in its main clause and its subordinate.

I would like to know what the differences are between the sentence "He had squirmed and wriggled and screeched when his father had washed his face. " and the sentence "He squirmed and wriggled and screeched when his father had washed his face. "

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    This kind of sentence would be used when a character in a narrative (in the past tense) remembers something that happened in their past. So this sentence might be in a story about a man who is remembering an incident from his childhood. Commented Oct 25, 2020 at 10:45
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    It's grammatical, but unusual, because English speakers often do not use the past-in-the-past where the temporal relationships are already clear. So even if they use the first had, they are unlikely to use the second one.
    – Colin Fine
    Commented Aug 19, 2021 at 20:12
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The sentence does not really make sense on a stand-alone basis because the past perfect is used to imply that an event occurred before another event in the past. And the two events explicitly mentioned presumably were concurrent as indicated by the word "when." But washing a face is not an instantaneous event. Thus, it would be more idiomatic to introduce the subordinate clause with "while" rather than "when" and to use either the past progressive or past perfect progressive for the subordinate clause's verb.

He squirmed and wriggled and screeched while his father was washing his face.

But if there was a sequence of events mentioned, then the double use of the past perfect would be perfectly appropriate.

Before he kicked his father in the shins, he had squirmed and wriggled and screeched while his father had been washing his face.

Moreover, in a context where the succeeding event to the washing and carrying on was clear but implied, the actual sentence would again be appropriate (as Kate Bunting pointed out in her comment), subject to my qualms about the conjunction and progressive.

In short, there is no rule against having a past perfect tense in both a main and subordinate clause when showing sequential actions in the past. The reason that it is unusual is the frequency with which the sequence itself is shown in different clauses of the same sentence.

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He had squirmed and wriggled and screeched when his father had washed his face.

Although that is grammatically correct, it has an unusual meaning. It means:

"He had always squirmed and wriggled and screeched after his father had washed his face."

In other words the squirming did not take place until his father had finished washing him. Although this is grammatically correct, I'm sure it is not was meant. The sentence should be written:

"He had squirmed and wriggled and screeched when his father washed his face."

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"He had squirmed and wriggled and screeched while his father was washing his face."

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