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"Same motive. Same will. That was all we needed to work together."

I wanted this to be more of a casual sentence so I skipped adding 'the' before 'same.'

But I'm not sure if the second part, "That was all we needed," has to be written as "they were all we needed." I think it's ugly.

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I suspect this question will be closed because it will be viewed as a matter of taste and therefore of opinion.

I want to point out, however, that the two choices have slightly different meanings. “That” focuses on the identity of motive and will between two or more people; it is singular. “They” focuses on the dual nature of the mutual agreement. So choose whichever best suits your intended meaning.

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